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Friday 11 November 2022

A shopworn formula

Scriptwriting is increasingly about hitting a formula, perhaps because writers and studio/network execs attend the same courses that say X must happen on page Y, and so forth. And today's scriptwriters only have a very limited toolbox of tropes, it seems. Since Alien, every SF/horror movie must have a maladjusted group of squabbling malcontents. That made sense in Alien, where the ship had a commercial crew on a boring long-haul mission, a crew whose dysfunctional dynamic was exposed by the loss of the senior officers who held them together. It makes less sense if the crew is supposed to be a squad of elite marines, or a hand-picked team of top scientists.

Likewise in war movies. Everything today's scriptwriters know of war, they picked up from watching Vietnam movies. That was an unpopular, hopeless conflict fought by draftees who often didn’t want to be there, so naturally the movies written by veterans often feature disenchanted, unruly, squabbling soldiers. But it makes no sense to apply the same dynamic to the troops at Dunkirk or advancing after D-Day – except that's the only way the writers have learned to imagine war.

Star Trek's famous "lack of conflict" is often mocked as naïve, not least by its current writers, but in fact it's the same dynamic as professional astronauts describe. They don't muck about the way George Clooney's character is shown doing in Gravity, nor snit at each other like rivals in a high school movie. When I worked in game development I used to encourage a team attitude where everyone is pulling together to face the common challenges. I called it "bridge of the Enterprise" culture, the very paradigm of grown-up, ego-free cooperation. It’s getting hard to remember now, but that’s what Star Trek once stood for.

Star Trek: TOS didn't lack for character conflict, of course. Not an episode passed without McCoy and Spock having a grumble about something. But I suspect what the producers of Star Trek: Discovery mean by conflict is to have characters constantly at loggerheads like the crew of the Prometheus. Presumably they’d interpret “bridge of the Enterprise” culture nowadays as all about recriminations, secret passions, grudges and shouting matches. But if the show is to make any kind of sense that could never happen; those characters wouldn't get into Starfleet in the first place.

More to the point (because credibility in SF and fantasy is so often taken to be a foolish goal) writing high school moodiness into all the scenes is the story equivalent of putting lens flare on everything. There are other ways to inject tension into a plot, other varieties of conflict than person to person, and other tones of conflict than the shout-n-sulk.

I don't want to get sidetracked into talking about The Rings of Power (which I haven't seen, nor the Peter Jackson movies either) but from the criticism it seems it's making exactly the same mistakes as those other shows and movies. Writers who only have a very limited range of character- and story-tropes not only know nothing but how to write "piss and vinegar" characters, they even think that's somehow innovative.

I'll leave the sign-off to Ursula K Le Guin. This is from her essay "From Elfland to Poughkeepsie", which is mostly about the jarring language used by bad writers, though that's part and parcel of the same problem:

"Tolkien writes a plain, clear English. Its outstanding virtue its flexibility, its variety. It ranges easily from the commonplace to the stately, and can slide into metrical poetry, as in the Tom Bombadil episode, without the careless reader's even noticing. Tolkien's vocabulary is not striking; he has no ichor; everything is direct, concrete, and simple. Now the kind of writing I am attacking [...] is also written in a plain and apparently direct prose. Does that make it equal to Tolkien's? Alas, no. It is a fake plainness. It is not really simple, but flat. It is not really clear, but inexact. Its directness is specious. Its sensory cues—extremely important in imaginative writing—are vague and generalized; the rocks, the wind, the trees are not there, are not felt; the scenery is cardboard, or plastic. The tone as a whole is profoundly inappropriate to the subject."

16 comments:

  1. Strange New Worlds perhaps aside, the best Star Trek these days is animated Star Trek with Lower Decks and Prodigy.

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    1. It may not be a coincidence that those are good. Lower budget and smaller audience means that the writers might be given more creative freedom.

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  2. Eh, it was alright. Those Youtube "The Rings of Power are the worst thing that has ever happened" videos are a combination of 2 things. Either just chasing likes, because depressingly, stoking negative emotions is more engaging and that's what gets rewarded online. Or just alt-right trolls getting mad because they decided to cast black people in some roles.

    Also you should totally watch the original movies. They're great.

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    1. None of the videos I saw were the slightest bit bothered by casting choices. The best were the videos by Book Furnace, who analyzes scenes and discusses what was wrong with the writing and how it could have been improved. Obviously a review that simply says, "I didn't like this" (or "I did like this") is useless, but an intelligent critique is invaluable to writers looking to hone their craft. As Alan Moore says of books, you can often learn more about writing by studying an abysmally written work than from a good one.

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    2. The link for any writers out there:

      https://www.youtube.com/c/BookFurnace/videos

      Trust me, this guy really knows his stuff and all of his videos are packed with smart tips.

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  3. As a ray of light after all that gloom, it seems there are TV writers out there who know their craft and are doing the work needed to create a good fantasy show. I haven't seen House of the Dragon either, not having made it to the end of Game of Thrones, but reviews like this show that TV fantasy doesn't have to be dreadful:

    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=sfXkVUhzoWo

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  4. I haven't watched "The Rings of Power", nor do intend to do it (and I even seldom watch TV), I only saw French-language videos about it (and of course, the Peter Jackson movies, which are a must, even if they are not 100% true to the novels). Beyond the "woke" and many other issues, one of the major problems is that they have tried to make a saga out of almost nothing in "narrative density". Even fans like me of the "Lord of the Rings" will agree that Tolkien's writings taking place before Bilbo's adventure can be boring as it is not about adventures, but rather chronicles of past events ("it's just like reading the Old Testament !" many have said). Their only interest is that they explain the background of later events after the Ring is found by Bilbo. Furthermore, the "necessary" division of the series into episodes of the same length implies a "pacing' of the (few) events : you know that something will have to happen before the ending of he episode, but meanwhile, you are utterly bored by the emptiness of the plot. Under such circumstances, it was quite obvious from the start that the serial was doomed to failure, but, when greed is greed....

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    1. I was listening to an interview with Matthew Holness (creator of the Garth Marenghi character) in which he was lamenting how formulaic, soulless and unimaginative big-budget TV has become. The networks want to cash in and they want complete control, so they aim to create brands and then hire writers for docility rather than talent. The strategy is to convince audiences that this is the show or movie that everyone is talking about. Thus fear of missing out convinces millions to tune in even while saying, "Oh, I suppose the story wasn't great but I liked the costumes," or whatever.

      As Oscar Wilde said: "The public have always, and in every age, been badly brought up. They are continually asking Art to be popular, to please their want of taste, to flatter their absurd vanity, to tell them what they have been told before, to show them what they ought to be tired of seeing, to amuse them when they feel heavy after eating too much, and to distract their thoughts when they are wearied of their own stupidity. Now Art should never try to be popular. The public should try to make itself artistic."

      If only TV audiences demanded real quality and originality, the networks couldn't get away with pap. Instead I think we're doomed to a decade of the same monolithic IPs being done to death in increasingly trite and lazy spin-offs. Even when they make a good spin-off (as many have said House of the Dragon is) I still think I've seen enough Westeros, it's high time for something fresh.

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    2. I agree with you on most of what you're saying above (that's why I seldom watch TV now), but here, this was "Tolkien's world", i.e. a full legendarium with all its codes. Blinded by greed, Amazon totally forgot this; Pr.Shippey, known as one of the most prominent specialists of Tolkien, resigned as a hired consultant (as far as I know, Carl Hostetter didn't do the same) and now that Christopher Tolkien is dead, the rest of the family cares most about royalties than loyalty to their ancestor. Finally, Amazon - or any other TV channel - could have written another fantasy TV series (why not based on Blood Sword...), but they thought they could buy "Tolkien" just like any other mundane thing. And finally, they fall just like Gollum into the volcano. And that's where it hurts the most...
      (I neither watched "Game of Thrones", but I was a finalist, many years ago, to act as a linguist for the Dothraki language. So I can tell you that they try to make things well and that Benioff is a serious guy)

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    3. Professor Shippey is renowned for his integrity and his understanding of the soul of Tolkien's work, so his resignation from the project was a sure sign it was turning into a mess.

      I think Amazon reasoned thus: Middle-Earth is a well known setting, but 90% of TV/movie audiences neither understand nor care about anything below the surface. They just want the trappings of high fantasy: creaky leather costumes, jewelled swords, magic rings, robes, palaces, gleaming horizons, glitzy SFX, dwarves and hobbits and elves, oh my. So Amazon figured they could take out the heart of the thing and turn it into a "medieval California" theme park version of Tolkien. It's much more palatable to worldwide audiences once all the idiosyncrasies and themes that made it distinct have been filed away.

      Obviously I think that whole approach is monstrous, and will just mean that eventually every fantasy TV show will be badly-written, charmless, formulaic crap -- and the appalling thing is that audiences are facilitating this process by giving the networks their money and shrugging and saying, "It whiled away a few hours. What more do you want." Oscar is right; they are complicit in their own exploitation.

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    4. I agree with a lot of the points here, Dave, although I have to say I found House of the Dragon quite dull. I'm not all the way through The Rings of Power yet so perhaps a little bit unfair to comment, but I have to say I'm finding that dull as well. Perhaps it's the point made above about a lot of Tolkien's work being dull at source, The Hobbit and The Lord of the Rings excepted.

      As moderate as The Rings of Power is, perhaps not quite as bad as The Hobbit films. How to spread out a short children's book over three long films to milk the cash cow, should have been the description on the trailer. I also greatly prefer Bakshi's animated version over Jackson's trilogy. Whilst it has some flaws, it had atmosphere and managed to capture the essence of the books, in my opinion. Whether that was the rotoscoping, musical score, voice actors, script, I'm unsure. It didn't have elves on surfboards at least.

      Or is that we're just old and cantankerous?! Perhaps it's something to do with the year that we get introduced to some of this stuff, a certain age window that makes the greatest impression, a point which you may have made somewhere on here before (unless I dreamt it). First film I watched at the cinema, The Empire Strikes Back, first sci-fi I watched on TV, Blake's 7 and The Day of the Triffids (BBC version), first film I watched on video, The Lord of the Rings. My favourites list hasn't much changed since circa 1982! 1985 was also a biggie for me with The Warlock of Firetop Mountain, Eye of the Dragon, Usurper, Warlock Magazine and The Tripods. That was the year, that was!

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    5. There's always been good and bad writing, Andy. The reason we're noticing a lot more bad writing these days is because of the streaming wars. Amazon, Netflix, etc, all rushed a lot of shows out to grab market share, and there aren't nearly enough experienced creative teams to manage the quality control. HBO was obliged by its parent company to vastly increase its output even though the reason for HBO's success was that it lavished a lot of care on a relatively small number of shows.

      No doubt there will still be good shows, but we'll have to wade through more dreck to find them. In that sense it's useful to identify the weary formulas that the bad writers resort to, because once you spot those you don't have to waste time on the rest of the show. Book Furnace highlighted a couple of examples (the guy commenting on the chess game and Galadriel pointlessly tugging a bit of rope on a raft) that are enough to tell me that show isn't going to be worth seeing.

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  5. I have thought that there was a lot of contrived conflict in fiction long before I could explain it. I actually enjoy it when the leads of a show are together and getting along. It's what I want from human relationships. Now, I know that most media involves conflict and sometimes "splitting the party", but if you just show that then there is no reason to believe that these people are friends or love each other in the first place. The most egregious examples involve some characters having about half a minute of screentime before being kidnapped/brainwashed for most of the rest of the series/film. There are many examples I can think of - the English version of Humans, The Avengers 2012 movie with Hawkeye and some movie I saw ages ago about an alien brother and sister who get separated after 5 minutes and the brother spends most of the film working for the villains.
    Preacher is another example, where one of my favourite bits is watching the three leads sit around and talk complete rubbish. There was a lot of this in season 1, some in season 2 and by season 3, they had all fallen out and split up. They were only briefly back in season 4. Ironically, the character who seemed the most agreeable in that show was Adolf Hitler.
    Imagine if in Lord of the Rings, the fellowship split faster than it did. I wouldn't have been so happy when Frodo and Sam were reunited with the others.
    Say what you want about Star Trek V, but I Ioved the camaraderie between the characters in the film. I want to see that more in media. I want to see people mainly agree and get along, like all groups of people who work together/are friends do. Sure, they can have conflict, but only after a lot of time of seeing them being friends so that when they do have a falling out, it feels like a big problem. Also, I find watching people engaging in constant conflict exhausting. How would the characters not be exhausted? Sure, there are some shows where the whole point is that the characters are locked in a constant conflict, which is fine if that's entertaining, but otherwise, I want to see characters act like how I think friends/spouses/coworkers should for most of the time.
    Also, as an aside, seeing people acting respectfully towards each other despite disagreeing might be an example to some people whose only interactions involve screaming at people on Twitter.

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    1. Star Trek V is one of my favourites (a lot more than Wrath of Khan or the comedy whales one) but I do need to clarify that I'm not against conflict in drama. In real life I'd like to see more win-win thinking, but fiction doesn't have to reflect how we'd like life to be. It does however have to be true on a fundamental level, and the likes of Prometheus and Rings of Power are simply fake. And lazy formulaic fake at that.

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  6. I saw "Rings of Power" and while I didn't hate it, I didn't love it either. My main issue with it is the same as with most fantasy series: the dialogue is often awful and delivered by actors who have zero idea how to do it properly. Sometimes I wish they'd stop having characters sound like they're giving an epic speech every time they open their mouth and just let them speak naturally. It'd be such a refreshing change to hear one of the characters talk like an actual person and not like an actor in a Shakespeare play, it'd almost make up for the other issues with the show.

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    1. As I haven't seen it, I kept my comments on it to the one paragraph. The writers' proud boast at creating "piss & vinegar" characters suggests they have definitely bought into the modern scriptwriting formula, though. Turgid dialogue is no surprise, as they are obviously trying to fit the formula to material (Tolkien's fantasy) that it's not suited for.

      When David Benioff wrote Troy, he got a compliment from Steven Spielberg at having found an idiom for the dialogue that sounded convincing yet at the same time wasn't jarringly different from everyday speech. He had a feel for it, sounds like the RoP writers just don't.

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